Troisnyx's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[Apple's Shocking iPhone]

I have to agree with the many other reviews that say this video bleeds pop culture. But here's my take on this:

1) You've got a sales pitch for iPhone CUPS which doesn't really *sell* the brand. It just states what it is. Commercials these days tend to hit home or be shocking, but this really wasn't. This was more..... like an 80's or 90's kind of descriptive commercial, which just doesn't fit.

2) The voices and music sounded alright — SexualLobster did an alright job with this —but beyond that, it did nothing much to impact me. The idea behind it was simply flat.

3) The animation was fine, but it's ultimately going to beat a dead horse. No amount of bells and whistles can make a bad idea look good. AT ALL.

For starters, whoever wrote this needs to make a more catchy, MUCH MORE APPEALING ad, if he's to get this thing across. None of this plain stuff. If you were pitching this in The Apprentice, what would it take for you to PASS the test? Surely something better. This, on the other hand, is dull, dull, dull.

And as a post-scriptum, considering what I saw in the end, this is CERTAINLY NOT rated E.

1/5. Courtesy star because of the alright animation and sound.

ADASport responds:

Thanks for your feedback. We are always looking to evolve!

[The Water Sound]

Alright, let's break this down section by section.

ANIMATION/GRAPHICS
The animation was quite alright -- not the most fluid (with the water splashes at times), but largely believable. I like how there's an orange hue to the animation in general, with the setting of the sun (or so it looks like).

SOUND
I find that in this case, the sound is the hook for anyone watching this film. It's so serene, it's so natural, and it can give inspiration to just about anyone listening. Beautiful work! Also, kudos on giving the poet emotion even when he doesn't have any spoken lines.

PLOT
Now this is what I call an effective plot. Many important things were said in a very short span of time --

1) If things get to you, stop, breathe, take time to not overwork yourself.
2) Inspiration comes where you least expect it (as was already said in the description).
3) If at first you don't succeed, try and try again.

In the span of just under two minutes, you showed us a man who wanted to dedicate himself to writing a beautiful piece of poetry but found it difficult to do this, and you effectively related to all the artists and musicians and writers and movie makers here who are in need of inspiration every now and again.

Also, great tribute to Matsuo Basho. : )

VERDICT (TL;DR)
Okay animation... I guess. Great sound, and especially solid plot. I honestly, honestly believe this should've scored higher than one or two things I found on the portal, but what's done is done, I guess. Thanks for sharing this with us, and thanks for inspiring us.

4.5/5.

RPGsrok responds:

Thank you sir for such a well thought out and detailed review! It's always a pleasure to receive one of these from someone who didn't merely enjoy the film, but took the time to explain that enjoyment, that I might improve further in the future.

This animation is about a year old now, and I feel my drawing and animation skills have improved drastically in that timeframe, but as an aspiring storyboard artist and director above all, it is heartwarming to hear that the story itself stood out to you the most.

As I said to one person below, it's thanks to people like you that these movies, even if they don't score as high as some other ones, find any welcome on Newgrounds, so many thanks to you, for watching, for enjoying, and for taking the time to share your thoughts!

[doesn't affect misdreavus]

Isn't that the animation that Chuggaa liked? I kinda liked it, though I thought the ending was..... sad...

Horsenwelles responds:

yep, he liked it and he flooded the video with hundreds of people through influence. my god what a fun way to start the day.

anyway, the ending is a humor deflection. an anti-joke in essence. its all about what just witnessed and how you are handling what events occurred on screen. its not as sad as it is emotionally conflicting, and thats why i chose it. eh, thats all fancy shmansey biz

[Kingdom Hearts the anime]

For a first movie, the artwork is impeccable.

Some parts of the animation need a few more frames to make them look natural, i.e. breath movements, moving hair... It looks unnatural if they just stayed put like that.

Also, try doing the same for those scenes of Cloud, Sephiroth, Terra, Ventus, Aqua etc... when they are shown on screen for like one second or two. Because those parts look like still images, and that makes the production a little sloppy.

Still, great job!

cateusart responds:

Glad you liked it.

[stars world]

Um..... Badly-spelt subs, short movie.... Mmmmmh...... I didn't get to listen to the audio but those visual flaws are already gashing the experience for me.

adriangoadrian responds:

be nice!

[Starsinger WIP]

I don't mind your art direction, and I really love the starry sky in the background. But apart from the intro, everything's pretty motionless... the girl especially. The best thing would be for a trance-like track to play, and she dances and sings. There are comets and night lights flickering and appearing every now and then, and it's an exhilarating space trip.

Now, I know animating this will be a chalenge, considering how you animated the girl in the intro. Even that animation wasn't completely seamless. The concept is alright, but a lot of work -- and I mean A LOT -- needs to be done.

cuddlesthemighty responds:

great idea's thanks.

[Let's Creep!]

Really good work!

I discovered this work after seeing that my track, Arise Once More, was featured in this, so I thought I'd take a look. I watched from Scene 1, and it's quite entertaining. ^_^ My only complaint would be that the subs are a bit unclear for all those colours on the screen...

Congratulations on your Daily Fifth Place, and keep it up!

DingoWalleyStudio responds:

I hope you don't mind I used the song without asking XD Thanks for liking the Cartoon though :D

[Epic Car Fall]

Um...

I know you worked hard on this thing, and I commend you for your effort, but I need to address a few things:

1. No sound effects for the crashing, bouncing and landing. It doesn't even give us the impression that it's supposed to sound real. All we hear are voices.

2. On the subject of voices, the voices sound pretty emotionless.

3. I know that the entire video was supposed to be like a cliffhanger, but it could've been done a lot better - screaming throughout the video destroyed it. And what's more, the 'Oh look, we're home!' was not resolved too well - it sounded like someone saying 'kthxbai' after his submission.

Please, polish up those aspects, and you'd do well with your submission. It'll be nice to see this remade in future, and I love the idea.

JKSSN responds:

Thanks! I am seriously a bad drawer, I dont know anyone who will voice with me, and internet problems forced me to use bad sounds.
But Im improving though so thanks for the tips!!!
Sooooo... kthnxbai! XP

[Arise & Shine INDIA]

Short but beautiful.

Such a short video has spoken volumes. Congrats to you guys for your efforts.

jackbliss responds:

Thank you so much! Jai Hind my brother :)