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My respect to you for finishing this in just two days.

If there's one thing that stands out to me, it's the driving bass -- the main theme melody and chords would come a close second, because I remember them and I have them playing in my head.

Oakwood responds:

Recently I have been trying to give my songs a lot more fat bass, seems that it's working out. :)
Thanks for the review, man!

The beginning is very evocative of a Modern Sonic stage (especially something you'd hear in Sonic Colours, or even Unleashed). I quite liked it, it did make me smile.

After the intro, though, the bass and drums could be a bit more driving -- I imagine some tension actually building up from the end of the intro to the beginning of the verse. That lack of buildup actually made me feel like it either had an anticlimactic start, or something went missing.

I quite like the synths you through around 1:03. The section around 1:20 also sounds happy. But again, with a bit more pumping bass and driving drums, it'd make people get up and dance out of happiness, you know what I mean?

2:29 onwards was a classic example of good buildup, considering how the main theme was repeated a number of times in the piece.

I have no complaints about the mixing; nothing seems really hard on my ears. It's just the musicality that I'm able to comment on for this piece. Still congrats on landing your entry to the RAC, and all the best!

ForeverBound responds:

Really thanks for the review. ( i've never heard any sonic songs) and u also goodluck with the RAC and let the best people win ;)

It makes me imagine this...

A man -- a priest -- sets off, at a time when the rest of his country is crumbling around him under enemy attack, but his province is safe. He goes out to find answers as to what exactly is happening. He goes from province to province, asking questions, helping others in need. And when he comes back to his home province (at which point the music plays)...... everything about it is lost. The place is destroyed and up in flames, a lot of his friends have been killed. He wants to weep and cry out in despair. And then, before he can do so, something catches his eye. Just within eyeshot is one of his long-lost friends, sprawled on the ground with multiple gunshot wounds, almost about to die. Worried about his friend's soul, the priest puts his stole on, picks his friend up in his arms, looks compassionately at him, and gives him an Extreme Unction.

The friend dies shortly after that. A few tears can be seen trickling down the priest's cheeks.

Now, I really love this piece, and I give you all my respect for it. For the scene I described, it could be made longer, but let me tell you this: writing this thought down has almost made me cry, and I hope it touches you as much as it touches me.

BlazingDragon responds:

Your scene carries a great deal of emotional weight. The priest left in search of answers, perhaps with hope in his heart, and yet he returns to such devastation. I can only imagine what he must have thought upon returning. Maybe he tormented himself wondering, "If I had stayed here, could this have been prevented? Would my dear friend be alive if not for my foolish haste?..." I can feel the cool tears roll down his face in contrast to the intense heat radiating from his flaming village. Along with his compassion, I wonder what other emotions are overtaking him? Is he angry at God for allowing the pain, or is he a praying that the Almighty forgive those mortals who caused this devastation? Will he allow the flame of hope to burn in his heart, or will he give in to the depths of his sorrow and give up his life as a priest?

Your words fit the music beautifully. Thank you for sharing your musing and providing me with inspiration. :)

This is something any brass band SHOULD play at a farewell. I quite like the harmonies, and the ending is something I'll always be looking forward to. I do wish the end wasn't too abrupt, and that it could have been left to decay, but otherwise, I really LOVE this piece.

On that note, in it goes into my favourites.

Nimble responds:

Thanks,I really,really enjoyed arranging the piece and hopefully I can get someone to play it in the near future :D

I know RAM maxing out is a pain. I have 2.5 GHz RAM and I still find it difficult to playback entire pieces on FL sometimes. Worse if that, Skype and Firefox are on.

Now onto the piece. I must agree with Chronamut in that the buildup is a bit too soft. I know you were going for buildup, and it was a very good attempt at that. But the climax should've been a lot more climactic! The ending was very anti-climactic, I mus admit, and it could've made for a heart-wrenching end.

That having been said, I love the chords and instrumentation you used.

Now if you can't work on full pieces with that kind of calibre because of the RAM, at least work pattern by pattern. Try to imagine Section A: what would the piece sound like there? And section B? And so on and so forth? Lighter sections are easier to play back, granted, so you could save some RAM processing time. If there are some programmes running that you don't want interfering with your FL playback time, don't hesitate to stop them.

Now take your work to greater heights!

ALECXACE responds:

Thank you

The ram thing is a pain and I learned to kill firefox and skype lol
But the piece after listening to it again I realized there is a lot that I can improve on and I am working on another version of this. thanks for the Advice btw

I gave it a three, because the notes were alright. But with dance pieces, especially Sonic remixes, you want to stand out. And this piece just didn't.

The dynamics need work, especially. The entire piece is almost at the same dynamic range, it feels monotonous. A good dance remix would wind things down at some point, build up the tension, and then come back in full force -- I trust you'll understand what I mean when you hear good dance pieces.

Then, samples. They were good. But I tend to be very, very iffy about the transition between the intro and the main theme. First, soft 8-bit samples, then a loud synth? Something doesn't click here. In the original Genesis version one was only slightly softer than the other -- it was noticeable, but it wasn't a drastic change.

Also, try a little bit of variation. I've noticed that the bass line is similar to the Genesis version -- pretty much everything is, except for the drums and samples. Adding variation will give this piece your own personal touch, and that's what listeners are here for.

I'm a very plainchant-ish / praise and worship person, but you've brought me back to middle ground with this piece. I'm going to go listen to some more things like these at some point.

In all honesty, though. This thing is sublime. The voice especially, and I was quite surprised to hear this kind of quality coming out from a MIDI voice. I do wish this thing had an ending, though -- a definitive ending which could either signify personal judgement, or salvation, either way. I imagine that'll justify the piece far better.

It's lovely as is, and I've enjoyed listening to your pieces -- I enjoyed listening to this one!

sorohanro responds:

Thank you for the very nice review.
Kind of finish in a question sort of... feel... I guess we'll have to find out for ourselves if there is "personal judgement, or salvation" :)

Pretty dreamy and whimsical. Your voice is lovely, and the buildup on the keys fits this piece a lot. :D I love this. You are especially expressive in this piece.

Again, I must reiterate that you have good chords, and as a keyboardist/pianist myself, I take notice.

Into my favourites list it goes! :D

bearkilgore responds:

Thank you very much! I really appreciate your observations and kind words! :)

There needs to be some buildup from verse to chorus, and I didn't hear much of it. I'm aware that you played this whole thing by yourself, and I salute you for this. But if the verse were softer than the chorus, we'd hear some expression going. Right now, we don't quite. That aside, you were in time, and there were no slips.

I'll be sure to listen to your other works and comment!

bearkilgore responds:

Yeah, this was just a test ... That was my first day at Newgrounds and I was still learning how it works. I wasn't really trying to perfect that one so it doesn't have much in the way of dynamics. Today it has been 17 days since I joined Newgrounds and I'm really likin' it :)

Hello, fellow Mario Painter. :D
A few things to note:

1) Volume control. You've got the green bars below to regulate the volume; try making use of them. I understand that this is your first song, and like you, I did not make use of the volume control when I made my first Mario Paint piece. But you'd do well to remember that. ^_- It especially shows in percussions when the drums are all the same volume and don't sound natural...

2) Chord variation. The piece sounds a little bland when the same chords are repeated all the way through. Try a little more variation! This, if not anything else, is the aspect that gashes the listening experience for me.

3) Buildup. You built up the piece well with a bit more instrument layering in each section. Also, the intro was quite good.

Congrats on your first song -- build up on what's good, knock out the kinks and you'll be well on your way to making better pieces!

Kasperkain responds:

Many thanks! Hearing good advice from an expert always makes me happy. I'll do my best to improve :)

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