Troisnyx's audio Reviews on Newgrounds

[The Legend Of Link Act:1]

I like the trance twist you've given this piece, and your voice is lovely! It's slightly off timing at the beginning, in places, but it doesn't gash the piece too much.

The rap section sounds terribly forced, though. The song's lyrics sound natural and are not hard on the ears when you're singing them. The narration is good too. As for the rap song, try making the lyrics more natural -- so that even when you're forcing them out, they don't sound like they've been written solely for the purpose of rhyming.

Good job; knock out the kinks and you're on your way.

GameBoyFireworks responds:

Good constructive criticism. Thanks!

[Clown survival]

This one is good -- it has some comic relief, it's disturbing (like something you'd see off a zombie clown video game), and it's in tune.

I would agree with the posters below me that it has to be louder. I was initially going to complain about the lack of buildup but then heard that the percussions are varied as this piece goes further. I would love to have seen the other parts actually buildup.

I love the introduction and the ending, very nice!

JoooRDz responds:

thankyou again! i just didnt record at a high enough volume -_-

[Floating Through Time]

The intro sounds like everything's panned to the centre, though it might be just me.

I quite like the feel you're going for with those synths, that you're meant to picture someone floating through time. For some reason, though, the percussions don't click. Also, some variation on chords would be REALLY GOOD right now. If you want to make sure that this piece really has a feel that it's floating through time, everything has to sound so.

A bit more could've been done with this piece. Try taking the chords you used there, and build it up from there. Make a melody, vary your chords, lighten your percussion, make sure everything is not panned to the centre.

JoooRDz responds:

thankyou for your review i will definitely attempt your ideas!

[A piece of memory]

For just the mere vision that you had in coming up with this piece, you deserve my respect.

Now I can imagine an epic battle song with this melody-- all this needs is an orchestration. Keep this melody, consider this a work in progress, come up with chords that fit it, and remember to build up and have a climax and resolution. Adding strings (marcato or pizzicato) could transform this piece altogether. Alternatively, why not make it a piano-only battle song? Fast piano accompaniment? The possibilities are many, and I like this starting idea that you have because of how far you can actually take it.

The piano by itself is insufficient, I find, because this seems to be playable by one hand for the most part. It seems like only the right hand is working its magic on the keys, but what about the left?

Please, do complete this thing. I would love to hear the final result! :D

Cheers!

EternalGames responds:

Actually this is playable in it's whole with just one hand :D

Seeing your approval I might actually try to make this a whole thing. Some of your ideas seem to be pretty awesome, but actually I wanted to focus more on brass for this one, seeing as I have never tried that before.

[I Want My Heart Back]

The guitar is lovely, the voice is beautiful and pierces right through. The lyrics don't sound forced for the most part (I tend to think them to be forced towards Verse 2, but maybe that's just me).

This was an enjoyable listen! Thank you for sharing. :D

DylanGlow responds:

Hey TroisNyxEtienne,

Thanks a ton for the fantastic review! It will have me totally rethink emotional portrayal when singing! It's something I never really consciously had in my mind.

Thanks a bunch,
~Dylan ^_^

[The Run]

Sounds like an 8-bit (Flash) platformer level theme, though what are you going to use this for?

Pleasant listen all the way round, and I take it that when you're building up the tempo halfway through the piece, you're not intending to make this a loop. I suppose the melody lines/chords can be a tad repetitive, so maybe a bit of melody (or secondary melody variation) might help?

Otherwise, great job. I enjoyed it a lot! :D

Jackayl responds:

Thanks for the feedback :)

Yeah this isn't intended to be a loop, but I might make another version that loops, and use that in a game.
I'm probs going to update the song soon so I'll try to make it less repetitive too.

[Lovely]

My only complaint is that this piece is short -- but we've heard a lot of your voice and harmonies in this short sample! Again, I don't know why this was voted down. Don't beat yourself up for this. I reiterate what I said previously -- you've got a good voice. I would love to hear this finished, even though it remains acapella. And if it should remain acapella, let it be -- so long as all of us at NG can hear the best of your voice!

Just so you know, I sing too. : ) So cheers from a fellow singer!

Naua responds:

Lol...Again, Thanx a bunch. I dont know what I would've done if I had no respond to my a capella. And since you're a fellow singer it's nice to finally conversate with someone who knows what I dont. And yeah, Im still working on trying to finish this piece because Im starting over so I could add more verses and vocals. Thanx again

[Forever]

I have no idea why this was voted down -- you were in tune for 90% of the songs, and the reverb is something that I'd normally use in acapella. And so what if you have a terrible mic? Your voice is beautiful, and I hate it when people don't see through that.

Well, this piece is going into my little favourites list. Keep up the good work!

Naua responds:

Thanx a lot. Thats all I really wanted was someone else's point of view. It really helps me get better at what I like to do and I never knew that people would like it so this is good news to me.

[Mighty Jungle]

The high voice is good, but the lower voices don't match -- it's like the chords are off. D: Really, this could've been a good song -- plus, the original Lion King version was acapella. Get your chords right, and it'll be awesome in no time!

Naua responds:

Dont worry, I wasn't serious in this a capella. I just wanted to have some fun. I can totally do a lot better. Thanx though, I need to know things like this.

[12-Bar Blues]

My thoughts on this one --

1. It's quite short, and as much as I know it's 12-bar blues, I would really love to see this built up further as a standalone piece.
2. I love easy listening, and this was a good listen. Cheered me up even! :D
3. I have some qualms about the piano at around 0:09: it does sound a tad messy on the right hand.
4. Is everything at the same tempo? I somehow feel a slight slowdown at the end (tempo envelopes?) might help -- the ending isn't so abrupt now, but it could be made even less so.

Now TBH, I have no idea why this was voted down so much... I enjoyed this piece a lot, kinks or no kinks. Thanks for sharing!

The-iMortal responds:

Thanks for the review. Yes, I reckon it does go out of time as it's live playing. Pretty unpro, but hey, it's a bit of fun :)